2016/02/28

Yearning for Old Fashion

My 5-year-old daughter's fever finally went down yesterday, but my husband still has a fever.

Maybe because he didn't get the flu shot.

Since they needed to rest at home, I accompanied my 7-year-old son's practice of riding a bicycle.

Then we went to the city library to return and borrow some books, then we went to the bookstore.

I bought him a book named "Doraemon the latest secret tools encyclopedia" as a prize of winning the Karuta competition held in his class before.

(I wrote about it in my previous post : http://a-o-j-m.blogspot.jp/2016/02/good-day-and-bad-day.html )

He had wanted it for a long time, so he was glad to have it.

1600 kinds of secret tools are introduced with their pictures in the book, and he enjoys drawing them looking at the book.


When we went out of the bookstore, I told my son:

"Can I stop by the Seven Eleven (convenience store)?"

"Sure. You want doughnuts, right?"

I was impressed that he was able to guess my idea.

"Yes. When we went to the Seven Eleven before, the doughnuts were already sold out. Do you remember it? I have wanted it since then."

We drove to the nearest Seven Eleven.

"What? Oh no! The store has been already closed! When did they go out of business?"

I was really surprised because I didn't notice the store closing even tough I passed in front of the store by car when I went to work.

We decided to go to another Seven Eleven.

"Oh my goodness! This Seven Eleven was also closing-out. Well, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? I DO want the doughnuts!"

I told him, and he said:

"OK! I want to eat the doughnuts, too!"

He seemed to enjoy this trouble.

We drove to another Seven Eleven again.

We reached there and went into the store.

"Look mom! There are doughnuts!"

"But... the Old Fashion ( a name of the doughnut ) is already sold out. I like it very much. If you are OK, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? After coming this far, I DO want to eat the Old Fashion! I know there is a Seven Eleven which opened recently near here. So let's go there!"

I drove my car about for 5 minutes, then we reached the Seven Eleven.

"I hope we can buy them this time!"

We went into the store.

"Wow! We finally found the Old Fashion! I will take three, please."

We finally bought them!

My son and I were glad together.

After we came home, we told my daughter and husband:

"We bought doughnuts! Let's take a break. But it's already 5pm!"

My children and I enjoyed eating the doughnuts of our wish.

Poor my husband didn't want to eat them as I expected because he still had a feer and couldn't taste.




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2 件のコメント:

  1. Hi Kumi-san,

    I am glad your question to track down the Old Fashion was a sweet success. It sounds like there are many 7 Eleven stores where you like. This must be useful for keeping well supplied with your doughnuts. Though it seems odd that some of the stores seem to be shutting down also.

    Here is a list of some of the issues found with the post:

    Part 1:

    This line;
    Since they needed to rest at home, I accompanied my 7-year-old son's practice of riding a bicycle.

    Should be:
    Since they needed to rest at home, I accompanied my 7-year-old son while he practiced his bicycle riding.

    This line:
    I bought him a book named "Doraemon the latest secret tools encyclopedia" as a prize of winning the Karuta competition held in his class before.

    Should be:
    I bought him a book named "Doraemon the latest secret tools encyclopedia" as a prize for winning the Karuta competition held in his class before.

    This line:
    1600 kinds of secret tools are introduced with their pictures in the book, and he enjoys drawing them looking at the book.

    Should be:
    1600 kinds of secret tools are introduced with their pictures in the book, and he enjoys drawing them while looking at the book.

    This line:
    I was impressed that he was able to guess my idea.

    Should be:
    I was impressed that he was able to guess my reason( for wanting to go).

    This line:
    "Yes. When we went to the Seven Eleven before, the doughnuts were already sold out. Do you remember it? I have wanted it since then."

    Should be:
    "Yes, I replied."

    Reason: In your original sentence the yes, I am assuming was you confirming what your son said, it was a little unclear, so I replied was added.

    This sentence:
    When we went to the Seven Eleven before, the doughnuts were already sold out. Do you remember it? I have wanted it since then."

    Should be:
    When we went to the Seven Eleven before, the doughnuts were already sold out. Do you remember? I have wanted some since then."

    Reason: Removed it, as it was unneeded. Changed wanted it to wanted some as this sounds more natural and I am also assuming would have purchased more than one doughnut.

    This line:
    "What? Oh no! The store has been already closed! When did they go out of business?"

    Should be:
    "What? Oh no! The store has shut down! When did they go out of business?"

    Reason: In the above sentence I am assuming that you mean the Seven Eleven was closed down permanently? Using closed only implies that it is normal closing time. To make clear that it is permanent it needs to be made more specific with "closing permanently" or "shutting down". Which is why I rewrote it.

    This line:
    I was really surprised because I didn't notice the store closing even tough I passed in front of the store by car when I went to work.

    Should be:
    I was really surprised because I didn't notice the store was going to shut down even though I passed in front of the store by car when I went to work.

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  2. Part 2:

    This line:
    "Oh my goodness! This Seven Eleven was also closing-out. Well, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? I DO want the doughnuts!"

    Should be:
    "Oh my goodness! This Seven Eleven was also (closing down/shutting down). Well, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? I DID want the doughnuts!"

    This line:
    I told him, and he said:

    Should be:
    I asked him, and he said:

    This line:
    We drove to another Seven Eleven again.

    Should be:
    We drove to another Seven Eleven.

    This line:
    We reached there and went into the store.

    Should be:
    (When we got/When we arrived) there and went into the store.

    This line:
    "But... the Old Fashion ( a name of the doughnut ) is already sold out. I like it very much. If you are OK, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? After coming this far, I DO want to eat the Old Fashion! I know there is a Seven Eleven which opened recently near here. So let's go there!"

    Should be:
    "But... the Old Fashion (the name of the doughnut) is already sold out. I like it very much. If you are OK, can we go to another Seven Eleven again? After coming this far, I DO want to eat the Old Fashion! I know there is a Seven Eleven which opened recently near here. So let's go there!"

    Question: At first I thought Old Fashion was an an incorrect typing error, but after searching I found:

    https://goo.gl/photos/zEyRMuHw6X3iNjuc8

    Is it common in Japan to say "Old Fashion" when in England we would say "Old Fashioned" or "Classic/Original"?

    This line:
    My son and I were glad together.

    Should be:
    My son and I were glad.

    This line:
    My children and I enjoyed eating the doughnuts of our wish.

    Should be:
    My children and I enjoyed eating the doughnuts (we had/I had) wished for.

    This line:
    Poor my husband didn't want to eat them as I expected because he still had a feer and couldn't taste.

    Should be:
    My Poor husband didn't want to eat them as I expected because he still had a fever and couldn't taste.

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